Monologue part 2

This is the third time that I have recorded my monologue and this time I tried a different tone than the one I had used this time. This time I was quieter and a little more sarcastic than before, which I felt fitted the character and the situation better than the video before.

The feedback I got from my partner was:
I like how you said some of it, like you said it factual. When you said ‘you don’t want to die, you just want affection’, you could say it a little more factual. You also seem really still, could you maybe try sitting down? Or if you are going to stand, try and make use of the space.

I need to make sure that I am learning the lines because the monologue was at a much slower pace than it should have been due to looking down at the paper. The flow was lost and the rhythm that I had created was ruined too, so the effect of the monologue was not as good as it should have been after watching it. I also need to work on how I am standing because it does not give off the status of Carla since she is higher up than Jessie, so this will be worked on when I am running it through.